Bad Radio Commercial Writing and How to Make it Better

I was asked to do a spec spot recently. In casethis Friday...Friday...Friday!!!
you've never heard that term, it's a radio commercialYes, the writing was that bad. The 60 second script
written and produced for a client who doesn't knowhad about 75 seconds of copy and there were at
he's a client yet.least 5 different ideas going on. I called my friend. She
Like builders sometimes put up houses on spechad questioned the sales assistant about the odd
(speculation) radio salespeople call on business owners,choice of style and was told it was all she could come
and as part of their pitch, they offer to have a specup with. My friend and I completely re-wrote the spot,
spot produced so the client can hear how good hisremoving the cliches, tightening up the copy, and
radio commercial will sound, should he choose tofocusing the message to one strong one instead of
purchase air time.the three different messages in the original script.
A good friend at a local radio station thought of me forThe secret to a good radio commercial is really no
a spec for one of her potential clients. She had thesecret: relate to the listener, use vivid, descriptive
spot written by a sales assistant and emailed it over tolanguage, keep the copy short, keep the message
me to voice, and I was to email it back to the stationfocused on one thought, include a call to action, and sell
production person so he could put sound effects andthe benefit the listener will get by using this client's
music under it for presentation to the potential client.service.
That's when the laughter started. The title of this articleMeanwhile, the spec spot is done. I hope it helps my
gives you a clue...think of all the Billy-Big-Voice,friend land her new account. I know it sounds better
reverb-laden commercials you've heard in your life,without all that Friday...Friday...Friday!!!
telling you about an event you just CAN'T miss, and it's